First Line Contest Winners Announced
Here are some of the trends we noticed:
Death /killing/dying: 12
Mentions of underwear: 2
Mentions of a god: 3
Mention of knives: 2
Shortest: 1 word [running]
Longest: 32 words
Mentions of drool: 2
Waking up: 3
And without further ado, the WINNERS!
First Place: Kalen O’Donnell
For my sixteenth birthday, my oldest brother tried to kill me again.
Second Place: Nikki Katz
Jocelyn stared at the guy sitting across the table from her, wondering how he’d react later – when he was drowning.
We choose a few who had high points in their first sentence, and then a few random comments.
Kimberly Kay – I thought I knew the definition of fear, but this time Webster was wrong.
Peggy Eddleman – You’d think I had never jumped off a 35 foot cliff before, based on how long I stood there, not jumping.
Erica Olson – I slammed the car door and rushed past the men putting pieces of my life into a big white truck.
Marcy Pusey – The first time MaryAnn died she was only nine years old.
Janet B Taylor – They say eyes are the window to the soul–or some crap like that–but for me, eyebrows are way more interesting.
Amy White – Oliver used to be ordinary–yesterday.
Susan Kaye Quinn – A zero like me shouldn’t take public transportation.
Random.org winners (for anyone who entered; bonus points to those who spread the word)
Winners: PLEASE CONTACT me with your name and address at chersti.nieveen [at] gmail [dot] com
I’ve noticed in other contests, they don’t tell you what worked and what didn’t. So to give you some feedback, here’s What made a good first sentence (in our eyes, at least)…
NOT Too common: the sentence seemed like it could belong in any story or was similar to other first sentences so it would blend in.
NOT a Cliché opening: such things that hinted the first chapter would be cliché or something the judge had read before were discarded.
NOT Too confusing: Meaning grammar mistakes or the judge had no idea what the sentence even meant.
Pulled the judge in. It intrigued enough that the judge would keep reading. If it was too obvious, it doesn’t pull the judge in. A sentence like: THE SKY IS BLUE makes the reader think yeah… so?
Humor/quirkiness. That was a definite draw and gave originality, allowing the judge to see the author’s voice in one sentence.
Had specific details as opposed to generalities. The more specific, the better the sentence could be visualized.