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March 18, 2011 / Chersti Nieveen

First Line Contest

What makes your manuscript stand out? We know how important that first line is for hooking an agent, editor, and reader. Now show us some great beginnings!

Open to picture book, chapter book, middle grade or young adult. Deadline: Midnight April 2, 2011.

First Prize:

A query critique by agent Mary Kole (Andrea Brown Literary Agency)
$30 Gift Certificate* towards Writing and Illustrating for Young Reader’s Conference, held June 13-17th, 2011 at the Waterford School in Sandy, Utah.


Second Prize:

A 5-page critique by author Martine Leavitt + 1 page of notes
$20 gift certificate* towards Writing and Illustrating for Young Reader’s Conference, held June 13-17th, 2011 at the Waterford School in Sandy, Utah.

Runner Ups can win one of the following books:

MATCHED by Ally Condie signed copy

FRESHMAN FOR PRESIDENT by Ally Condie signed copy

WHITE CAT by Holly Black signed copy

THE WHEAT DOLL by Alison Randall signed copy

WORLDSHAKER by Richard Harland (Simon & Schuster)

MONSTERS OF MEN by Patrick Ness (Candlewick Press)

FIRELIGHT by Sophie Jordan (Harper)

DEMONGLASS by Rachel Hawkins (Hyperion)

REMOTE CONTROL by Jack Heath (Scholastic)



A MAP OF THE KNOWN WORLD by Lisa Ann Sandell (hardcover)

MARCELO IN THE REAL WORLD by Francisco X. Stork (hardcover)

THE LITTLE GIANT OF ABERDEEN COUNTY by Tiffany Baker (hardcover)

DAWN by Kevin Brooks (ARC)


Rules: To be eligible to enter, you must do one of the following options: [OPTION A] sign up for the WIFYR Newsletter (fill out your info and select that option at the bottom) OR [OPTION B] follow WIFYR on Twitter and ‘like’ WIFYR on Facebook. If you aren’t on facebook or twitter, you can still enter but mention that in your comment (if you do that option, you should at least be on one of those).  Don’t worry about giving the links, but we will be disqualifying anyone who hasn’t followed the instructions. One entry per person; entries must be the first line of your manuscript. They need not be a complete sentence, but an entry that is more than one sentence, such as an entry that clearly tries to squeeze multiple sentences into one, may be disqualified.

Submit your entries by commenting below. Please make sure you’ve qualified by going to Twitter and Facebook and signing up for the newsletter, then submit your comment in the following format:

option you chose [A or B]

Your amazing first sentence.

You don’t have to spread the word, but this contest is so awesome that we’ll give you an extra entry for every place you post about it (for the runner up book prizes). Just give us the links below to verify! Contest winners will be posted no later than April 9th here on the blog. First and Second prize will be judged based on merit of the first sentence.

*You can use your gift certificate for the following workshops at the Writing and Illustrating for Young Readers Conference:

Please note: The conference discount cannot be applied to registration fees that have already been paid. It is, however, exchangeable.

Mike Knudson’s Chapter Book and Middle Grade class: Mike’s class will be an enjoyable step back into the students’ middle-grade selves, discussing how to create strong, memorable characters even reluctant writers will love.Editors and agents are consistently looking for books that appeal to boys. Mike has written successfully for that audience in his popular chapter books. He is also gifted at writing humor, and he will also share his secrets for successful marketing.

Emily Wing Smith’s Beginning YA class: Emily is the author of two successful books and has an MFA in children’s writing. She has attended WIFYR in years past, and feels this has taught her how to run a workshop with the right balance between instruction and class participation. She encourages writers to finish their YA books, and loves to nurture her students as they work toward that goal.

Kristyn Crowe’s Picture Book Class: With the goal of having each student leave the workshop with at least one salable manuscript, she will provide writing tips, a list of agents presently acquiring, and other valuable information. In the past she’s seen how writers can do well at critiquing other’s writings, but have difficulty translating that into their own work. She has devised a “critique sheet” to help writers evaluate their own work.

Sharlee Glenn’s Beginning Writing Class: This class focuses on the writing process and the fundamentals of good writing. Attendees will also learn the nuts-and-bolts of children’s book publishing (how to submit a manuscript, the publication process, copyright issues, negotiating contracts, etc.). Throughout the course of the week, we will touch on all the major categories of children’s books (picture books, easy readers, early chapter books, middle-grade novels, and YA novels) and will enjoy guest lectures from published authors in the above genres. Because this is a hands-on workshop, participants are asked to bring a work-in-progress (a picture book manuscript or several chapters of a novel) to class to be shared, critiqued, worked on, and polished.



  1. Marquita Hockaday / Mar 18 2011 11:28 am

    Name: Marquita Hockaday

    Genre: Contemporary YA Mystery


    Option A!

    1st sentence: Henry Knight was found bludgeoned to death early this morning.

  2. Nahno McLein / Mar 18 2011 11:42 am

    This sounds great, so I have to take part. Here we go:

    Nahno McLein
    Young Adult/Romance
    Type B:

    The twitch comes rarer now.

    Thanks for this awesome contest.
    Nahno ∗ McLein

  3. Christa / Mar 18 2011 11:43 am

    Christa Desir
    Contemporary YA
    Option A
    “Logarithms and differential equations were sucking the marrow out of my social life.”

  4. janet0721 / Mar 18 2011 11:43 am

    Thanks so much for having this contest!

    Name: Janet B Taylor
    Genre: YA
    Option B- Twitter name Janet_B_Taylor

    First sentence: They say eyes are the window to the soul–or some crap like that–but for me, eyebrows are way more interesting.

  5. Erin / Mar 18 2011 11:45 am

    Name: Erin Cabatingan
    Genre: Picture Book
    email: ecabatingan at gmail dot com

    Monday morning Martians moved into Josh’s castle.

    Option A

  6. Jared Garrett / Mar 18 2011 11:51 am

    Name: Jared Garrett
    Genre: YA fantasy
    option you chose [A or B]: B

    “This will be the end of us.”

  7. Dorothy Dreyer / Mar 18 2011 11:54 am

    Name: Dorothy Dreyer

    Genre: YA Paranormal Romance


    Option B

    (And I tweeted it:!/DorothyDreyer/status/48819314551304192 )

    1st sentence: One thing I can say for sure is I’m the only muse in history to ever have been grounded.

  8. Tiffany Dominguez / Mar 18 2011 11:54 am

    Tiffany Dominguez

    Steampunk YA

    Option A

    Veronica slid her long-barreled Tesla-ray gun slowly out of its holster, flipped it on stun, and peered around the side of the ten-story brick building.

  9. Taryn / Mar 18 2011 11:55 am

    Name: Taryn Albright
    Genre: YA Thriller
    Email: tarynal AT
    Both options 🙂
    1st sentence: The Sour Patch Kids in the bottom of Heidi Maverick’s sparkly clutch probably bothered him the most.

  10. Courtney Stevens Potter / Mar 18 2011 12:01 pm

    Name: Courtney Stevens Potter
    Genre: YA Realistic Fiction
    Option B – Twitter as quartland, Facebook as Courtney Stevens Potter
    First Sentence:
    “I have a secret and it’s not the bump me up a cup-size Victoria kind.”

  11. Tamara Hart Heiner / Mar 18 2011 12:14 pm

    Name: Tamara Heiner

    Genre: YA Paranormal


    Option B!

    1st sentence: The smell always hits me first.

  12. Alwyn / Mar 18 2011 12:16 pm

    Name: Alwyn Hamilton
    Genre: YA Dystopian
    Option: B (Twitter)

    First sentence:

    The first thing you should know about the Academy of American Superheroes is that it’s the sort of place that’s crazy for mottos.

  13. Allyson Schrier / Mar 18 2011 12:37 pm

    I selected Option A and registered for the newsletter

    My first line of a middle-grade novel:

    I keep my dad in a peanut butter jar beside my bed–the Costco size.

  14. Jamie Krakover / Mar 18 2011 12:50 pm

    Name: Jamie Krakover

    Genre: YA Science Fiction


    Option: B


    1st sentence: A man in a long black overcoat ran down a narrow abandoned alley.

  15. Nichole Giles / Mar 18 2011 12:53 pm

    Name: Nichole Giles
    Genre: YA Paranormal
    Option B–like on #FB, and also followed on twitter @nicholegiles

    First sentence: Though it’s not yet dark, fear sweeps my blood into overdrive, raising the fine hairs on my skin, and wrapping around me like a scratchy blanket.

  16. The Damsel in Dis Dress / Mar 18 2011 1:10 pm

    Name: Margot Hovley
    Genre: YA Fantasy
    Option B

    1st sentence: Alek felt a chill shiver down the back of his neck.

  17. Caitlyn 'Libby' Webber / Mar 18 2011 1:55 pm

    Name: Caitlyn ‘Libby’ Webber

    Genre: YA Action/Adventure


    option you chose [A or B]: Option B

    Your amazing first sentence: Aeron dashed down the hill from the manor—just ahead of her twin brother, Decius—cutting through the family cemetery and past the gardens to the West wall.

  18. Peggy / Mar 18 2011 2:10 pm

    Name: Peggy Eddleman
    Genre: Middle Grade
    Email: peggyeddleman(at)yahoo(dot)com
    Option B

    You’d think I had never jumped off a 35 foot cliff before, based on how long I stood there, not jumping.

  19. Helene Dunbar / Mar 18 2011 2:14 pm

    Option you chose [A or B]: B

    Genre: YA Paranormal

    First Sentence: I got a box for Christmas and in it were eleven stolen souls.

  20. MB West / Mar 18 2011 2:25 pm

    Name: Melissa West
    Genre: YA sci-fi romance
    option A

    I stare out my window into the darkness of night, hoping to see
    them — or rather him.

  21. Jennifer Jones Smith / Mar 18 2011 3:05 pm

    Name: Jennifer Jones Smith

    Genre: Picture Book


    Option B – Twitter and Facebook

    I don’t know why Mom held our new poodle on her lap and called her ‘Poospie Woopsie’.

  22. Karen Collum / Mar 18 2011 7:15 pm

    Name: Karen Collum

    Genre: Picture Book

    Email: karen[at]karencollum[dot]com[dot]au

    Option A & B

    On the night one wombat grumbled, two ring-tailed possums rumbled, three sneaky dingoes hunted and four koalas grunted, Mr Jumbelina couldn’t sleep.

  23. Robin Weeks / Mar 18 2011 10:30 pm

    Name: Robin Weeks
    Genre: YA UF
    email: cardinal[underscore]law[underscore]76[at]yahoo[dot]com
    Option A and B (who can choose?)
    And I tweeted about the contest.

    My amazing first sentence:

    Brina’s only warning was a light brush on her upper left wing.

  24. Keely Done / Mar 19 2011 6:49 am

    Name: Keely Done
    Genre: YA Urban Fantasy
    email: keely[at]donefamily[dot]org
    Option: A and B
    First Line:
    My stomach muscles clenched painfully, my mouth watering as I watched him slowly strum his guitar.

  25. Lois / Mar 19 2011 7:31 am

    Name: Lois D. Brown
    Genre: MG mystery

    Option A: I signed up

    1st sentence: I’ve never seen anything dead before.

  26. Liz / Mar 19 2011 7:42 am

    Name: Liz Norcross
    Genre: MG
    email: lizardnorcrossyahoocom
    option: B

    First Sentence:
    I knew how Hansel and Gretel felt.

  27. Anita Morgan / Mar 19 2011 7:47 am

    Name: Anita Morgan
    Genre: Young Adult – Fiction
    option you chose: B

    First Line: I started awake with the insistent beeping of my alarm.

  28. Becca Lee / Mar 19 2011 8:26 am

    Name: Becca Lee Jensen Ogden
    Genre: Middle Grade
    email: Becca[dot]Jensen[at]gmail[dot]com
    option you chose: I am receiving the WIFYR newsletter.

    My name is Michael Isaac Layton and neither of my parents is dead.

  29. KT / Mar 19 2011 9:40 am

    Name: KT Howard
    Genre: Science Fiction
    Option: A

    First Line: I stood at the end of the corridor repeatedly opening the door for the first time

  30. Christopher Spanel / Mar 19 2011 10:07 am

    Name: Christopher Spanel
    Genre: YA Fantasy
    option: Option B

    First Line: Lyal had never thought to be a god.

  31. Amy White / Mar 19 2011 10:17 am

    Name: Amy White
    Genre: Picture Book
    email: Saltzworks(at)gmail(dot)com
    option you chose [A or B]: A & B

    Oliver used to be ordinary–yesterday.

  32. TA Demings / Mar 19 2011 11:09 am

    Name: T. A. Demings
    Genre: YA contemporary
    option: B (I have facebook, but not twitter) A (shouldn’t I already get the newsletter if I’m registered for WIFYR?)

    First Line: There are some things people don’t tell.

  33. Kim / Mar 19 2011 11:14 am

    Name: Kim Woodruff
    Genre: YA Fantasy
    email: kimmikit(at)netscape(dot)net
    option you chose [A or B]: A and B

    First sentence: The day the king sold the world and his son with it for a fine pie was the day Mama discovered my curse.

  34. Karen Elizabeth Brown / Mar 19 2011 12:42 pm

    Name: Karen Elizabeth Brown
    Genre: YA Fantasy
    Option: B (no twitter)

    Amazing First Sentence: As soon as Hestia linked her mind with the Orb of Truth, she knew that someone had foolishly entered Horner’s Maze without supervision.

  35. Mary Ann Duke / Mar 19 2011 1:22 pm

    If a person wins, but can’t come to Utah for the WIFYR Conf. what happens to the part of the prize that goes toward that conf. registration? Thanks. Good Luck Everyone!

    • Chersti Nieveen / Mar 19 2011 10:00 pm

      Great question!

      If a person wins either first or second prize, but can’t come to Utah for the WIFYR Conf, then that person can transfer the gift certificate to a friend or relative who will be able to redeem it. If the winners doesn’t know anyone who is interested in redeeming the gift certificate, then we will move on to another contestant until the gift certificate is redeemed [first moving down to the runner ups and then using for the remainder of the contestants]. This is such an amazing contest, so we don’t want the gift certificate to go to waste!

  36. Amy L. Sonnichsen / Mar 19 2011 2:08 pm

    Great contest! Thanks for the opportunity, Chersti.

    Name: Amy L. Sonnichsen
    Genre: Contemporary YA
    Option: B — Followed on twitter, liked on facebook

    First line: Give me a well-sharpened knife.

  37. Valerie Ipson / Mar 19 2011 3:03 pm

    Name: Valerie Ipson
    Genre: YA Contemporary
    Choosing option A

    Amazing first sentence: Whose idea was it to broadcast the screen-sized faces of the dead to the farthest shadowy corners of the school’s auditorium?

  38. Kimberly Kay / Mar 19 2011 5:20 pm

    Name: Kimberly Kay
    Genre: YA Contemporary Fantasy
    Option: B (no twitter though)

    My Amazing First Sentence: I thought I knew the definition of fear, but this time Webster was wrong.

  39. Alicia Caldwell / Mar 19 2011 7:44 pm

    Name: Alicia Caldwell
    Genre: YA Urban Fantasy
    Option: B (both FB and Twitter)
    I tweeted about the contest also!/aliciacald

    Opening Sentence: Darlene looked down at her small, petite hands and then over at her boyfriend, lying unconscious on the ground.

  40. Jenni Darby / Mar 20 2011 7:58 am

    Name: Jenni Darby

    Genre: Mainstream Fiction


    Option B

    First Sentence: “Please don’t be him, I prayed as I jolted awake.”

  41. Britney Stapley / Mar 20 2011 10:39 am

    Name: Britney Stapley

    Genre: YA Sci-Fi

    Option B (No Twitter)

    First Sentance: A howl ripped the night.

  42. Carolyn Frank / Mar 20 2011 2:10 pm

    Name: Carolyn Frank

    Genre: YA dystopia


    Option A

    First sentence: Born into bondage, Seethea took her first breath like she owned it.

  43. Kalen O'Donnell / Mar 20 2011 3:02 pm

    Name: Kalen O’Donnell

    Genre: YA Urban fantasy



    First line:

    For my sixteenth birthday, my oldest brother tried to kill me again.

  44. Lori M. Lee / Mar 20 2011 6:06 pm

    Name: Lori M. Lee
    Genre: YA urban fantasy
    Email: leemai82 at gmail dot com
    Option B!

    On his thirteenth lap around the block, London Howell ripped off the advertisement stapled to his neighbor’s fence.

  45. marcyp / Mar 20 2011 10:13 pm

    Chersti! Thanks for subscribing to mine too! 🙂 Always love joining others on this journey 🙂

    Name: Marcy Pusey
    Genre: YA Memoir
    option you chose: B

    “The first time MaryAnn died she was only nine years old.”

  46. Ella W / Mar 21 2011 4:19 am

    Name: Ella Watney
    Genre: YA fantasy adventure
    Option: B

    “From where Tawn was sitting, half way up a large and twisted chestnut tree, she could just see into the house across the road while being reasonably confident that she herself was hidden from view.”

  47. danastrange / Mar 21 2011 8:12 am

    Name: Dana Strange

    Genre: Middle Grade


    Option: A

    Did I ever tell you about the time I was Japanese?

  48. Marion Steiger / Mar 21 2011 8:57 am

    Name: Marion Steiger

    Genre: Middle grade fiction


    Option: A

    The best part of every school day begins when it ends.

  49. Susan Buttars / Mar 21 2011 9:35 am

    Name: Susan Buttars
    Genre: YA Adventure Fantasy
    Email: susan at buttars dot net
    Option: B – liked on facebook

    The manacles clicking shut on my wrists was not my first indication that something had gone horribly wrong, but nearly so.

  50. Juliette / Mar 21 2011 9:44 am

    Name: Julie Caron

    Genre: YA Contemporary


    option B–I liked on facebook (I don’t have a twitter account)

    “Hi, my name is Chloe Ryder,” I say to my reflection in the bathroom mirror, the words feeling foreign on my tongue.”

  51. Kevin M Smith / Mar 21 2011 10:00 am

    Name: Kevin M Smith

    Genre: MG Science Fiction.


    I have signed up for the newsletter, following wifyr on twitter and liked on facebook.

    Where’s my bed? I thought to myself, flailing beneath me and finding nothing there.

  52. Cindy Hogan / Mar 21 2011 10:02 am

    Cindy Hogan

    Young Adult

    Option A

    I plastered a smile on my face, trying in vain to stop the shiver that traveled with slow determination up my spine.

  53. Heather Darger / Mar 21 2011 10:31 am

    Name: Heather Darger
    Genre: Middle Grade Fantasy
    Option: A
    1st Line: Trouble always found me no matter how hard I tried to stay away, but this particular morning I went looking for it.

  54. Elizabeth Dimit / Mar 21 2011 10:34 am

    Name: Elizabeth Dimit
    Genre: MG fantasy
    Options: A & B

    A proper princess does not throw mudballs.

  55. Shannon O'Donnell / Mar 21 2011 12:36 pm

    Name: Scott and the Naughty Boy Factory
    Genre: Chapter Book
    email: mrso_d at yahoo dot com
    option you chose: [A]

    I crouched in my favorite tree, fourth branch up from the ground and only one branch over from my sister’s piñata.

  56. Heather Muir / Mar 21 2011 4:06 pm

    Sorry! Here is is with all the info!

    Name: Heather Muir


    Genre: YA Science Fiction

    Option A and B!

    The end of the world smells like burnt brownies.

  57. Melissa J Cunningham / Mar 22 2011 6:25 am

    I should have realized that suicide was not my best option.

  58. Melissa J Cunningham / Mar 22 2011 6:26 am

    Forgot to mention I chose option B.

  59. ebyss / Mar 22 2011 6:27 am

    Name: Ebyss


    genre: paranormal romance

    Option B

    First sentence: The feel of Aaron’s arm lying across Myriam’s shoulders made her skin crawl, like little spiders skittering under the fair layer of her epidermis.

  60. A. Grey / Mar 22 2011 6:27 am

    Name: Artemis Grey
    Genre: YA Dystopian
    Option: A

    Life is so much easier without underwear.

  61. Amber / Mar 22 2011 7:38 am

    Amber Wredberg

    Genre – picture book

    Option A

    Email –

    Sentence – Berkley smelled like old fish and sea dirt.

  62. Karen Krueger / Mar 22 2011 11:52 am

    Karen M. Krueger
    YA Urban Fantasy
    No preference
    karenmkrueger at gmail dot com

    I click my heels together three times, and staring at the red velvet curtain in front of me, I think, There’s no place like the stage.

  63. Taffy / Mar 22 2011 1:05 pm

    Taffy Lovell
    YA Fiction
    Option B

    “The friends I had are no longer here; every single one left me by way of expiring.”

  64. Jenilyn Tolley / Mar 22 2011 2:28 pm

    Name: Jenilyn Tolley
    Genre: YA fantasy
    jenilyntolley at gmail dot com
    Option A

    I used to believe my real mom was a stripper.

  65. Mary Ann Duke / Mar 22 2011 2:49 pm

    I chose Option A
    Middle Grade Novel

    “Watch out! Don’t step in that pile of dog poop,” I warned my brother as she bounded through Mrs. Carter’s yard.

    • Mary Ann Duke / Mar 22 2011 3:05 pm

      Correction to My First Line:
      “Watch out! Don’t step in that pile of dog poopl” I warned my brother as HE (not she) bounded through Mrs. Carter’s yard.
      Yikes! You’d think I could write ONE line correctly if I think I can write an entire book!

  66. Christy Dorrity / Mar 22 2011 6:03 pm

    Christy Dorrity
    YA paranormal romance
    option B
    If I tilted my calculator just right, I could see Lucas in its reflection without him noticing.

  67. Rosalyn / Mar 22 2011 7:58 pm

    Name: Rosalyn Eves
    Genre: YA fantasy
    Email: rosalyn.eves at

    Option A (also liked on facebook)

    First line: Karan had believed in the gods all her life; that didn’t mean she actually wanted to *meet* one.

  68. Kym Balthazar Fetsko / Mar 23 2011 9:25 am

    Kym Balthazar Fetsko
    MG Fantasy
    Option B

    Simon Blue knew this day was coming, the one-year anniversary since the war stole his dad, and there was nothing he could do to stop it.

  69. Susan Kaye Quinn / Mar 23 2011 8:24 pm

    Here’s my tweet:!/susankayequinn/status/50759420086456320

    And I signed up for the newsletter – I SO WISH I could go to that conference! Esp. with Holly Black there.

    OK, my entry:

    Name: Susan Kaye Quinn
    Genre: YA
    option you chose [A or B] A

    A zero like me shouldn’t take public transportation.

  70. Grace Dow / Mar 23 2011 11:08 pm

    Name: Grace Dow
    Genre: YA Fantasy/Horror
    Option A

    Em told me once that the start and end of all our troubles was a door.

  71. Rebecca J. Carlson / Mar 24 2011 11:13 am

    Name: Rebecca J. Carlson
    Genre: MG fantasy
    option: A

    Mom must have said it a million times, every time I left the house, don’t play in the street, don’t talk to strangers, and don’t tell anyone about the closet.

  72. Joy Newbold / Mar 24 2011 5:08 pm

    Name: Joy Newbold
    Genre: YA Fantasy
    option A

    I disturbed him, maybe even frightened him a little, and it felt marvelous.

  73. Sierra Klemm / Mar 24 2011 9:18 pm

    Name: Sierra Klemm

    Genre: Contemporary YA

    Option B–liked on Facebook


    The doctors told me I was a miracle to have survived, but I don’t remember any of it.

  74. Priscilla Mizell / Mar 25 2011 5:43 am

    Name: Priscilla Mizell
    Genre: PB
    Option: A

    When Dad went missing, Alex went searching.

  75. Josin / Mar 25 2011 6:11 am

    Name: Josin L. McQuein

    Genre: YA fantasy (reimagined fairy tale)


    Option: A

    First line: The voices of the dead never truly leave; they become the wind, and roam the barren places of the world seeking solace.

  76. Jess Lawson / Mar 25 2011 6:37 am

    Link to “I spread the word” (at the bottom of the blog post under IN OTHER NEWS):

    Name: Jessica Lawson
    Genre: Middle Grade Adventure
    Option: B

    When I was born in a Bolivian rainforest, Dad’s job was to keep me quiet so the raiding tribe wouldn’t shoot us full of poison darts.

  77. Nikki / Mar 25 2011 7:07 am

    Name: Nikki Katz

    Genre: YA Paranormal/Mythology


    Option: B

    First line: Jocelyn stared at the guy sitting across the table from her, wondering how he’d react later – when he was drowning.

  78. LadyJai / Mar 25 2011 7:15 am

    Name Jamie Dement (LadyJai)

    Genre Picture Book

    email ladyjai at

    option A

    Walter lumbered about, day in and day out, as his home tumbled through space.

  79. Ryan Hunter / Mar 25 2011 7:17 am

    Name: Ryan Hunter

    Genre: MG Horror


    Option B

    First line: The creepy house was right across the street from my house.

  80. Brittany Melson / Mar 25 2011 7:26 am

    Name: Brittany Melson (title of book is Bloodstone)
    Genre: Paranormal Young Adult
    option you chose [A or B]: Followed on Twitter
    Firs Line:
    “No, I will not use my employee discount to save you fifty cents on tampons,” I told Tonya again, just in case she didn’t hear me the first four times.

  81. Jessica Morrison / Mar 25 2011 7:49 am

    Name: Jessica Morrison
    Genre: Middle Grade
    option you chose [A or B]: Followed on Twitter
    First Line:
    “It wasn’t the first time I’d woken up with a rattlesnake in my bed, but it was definitely the most recent.”

  82. Melissa K / Mar 25 2011 8:07 am

    Name: Melissa Koosmann
    Genre: Chapter book
    Email: melkoosmann at yahoo dot com
    Option A (signed up for newsletter)

    Half an hour after Kestrel Falk arrived in Arizona, she wanted to go home.

  83. Jared Larson / Mar 25 2011 8:08 am

    Name: Jared Larson
    Genre: MG Adventure/Humorous
    Email: iwillwhisperno at
    Option: B

    First Line: I never lie.

  84. Amy Jarecki / Mar 25 2011 9:01 am

    Name: Amy Jarecki
    Genre: YA Historical (Native American)
    email: amyjarecki (at) gmail (dot) com
    Option: A and B
    First Sentance: Since the day of my birth incessant training prepared me for my rite, yet at this moment, fear consumed me.

    • Amy Jarecki / Mar 29 2011 12:12 pm

      Sorry for the typo – Sentence not Sentance…oh brother. 🙂

  85. Leslie Creek / Mar 25 2011 10:08 am

    Name: Leslie Creek
    Genre: YA
    email: lesliea1968 at yahoo dot com
    I completed Options A and B because I’m that neurotic.

    “It started as a dream and turned into something so real I could feel the point of the knife against my throat.”

  86. Tina / Mar 25 2011 10:49 am

    Name: Tina Crossgrove
    Genre: YA Steampunk
    option you chose: A

    Your amazing first sentence: Ying-Shi did not like cleaning the whorehouse.

  87. Angela Peña Dahle / Mar 25 2011 11:21 am

    Name: Angela Dahle

    Genre: PB (quirky)


    Option: Option B

    My first sentence: Delila was feeling gloomy and there was nothing anyone could do about it.

    I’m so glad to see all these first lines here! Yippee! Yea!

  88. Karen McCluskey / Mar 25 2011 11:32 am

    Name: Karen McCluskey
    Genre: YA Fantasy
    Option A
    First line: I can make all your dreams come true, for a price.

  89. Terry Tibke / Mar 25 2011 11:35 am

    Name Terry Tibke
    Genre Fantasy Adventure-Chapter Book
    option you chose [A or B] B

    Worrick opened his eyes and wiped the drool from his mouth.

  90. davehaynes78 / Mar 25 2011 11:45 am

    Name: Dave Haynes
    Genre: Fantasy Adventure/Humor – Picture Book
    Email: elmogallen at (trying to avoid some automated spam there; hope you don’t mind…)
    Option: B

    Lancelot ran into Arthur’s room, tripped, and fell flat on his face.

  91. Alison / Mar 25 2011 12:46 pm

    Name: Alison Cherry
    Genre: Contemporary YA
    Option: B

    First line: The day I meet Cat Wellesley, I become a supporting character in the story of my own life.

  92. ryanjamesburt / Mar 25 2011 12:51 pm

    Name: Ryan Burt
    Genre: YA Action/Adventure
    Option B

    1st sentence: A thick line of drool was dripping down a foot long tusk and almost fell on my head.

  93. Donea Weaver / Mar 25 2011 1:42 pm

    Name: Donea Weaver
    Genre: YA Magical Realism
    Option A

    I woke Mom up with a sound she best described as a helium-sucking squirrel.

    Thank you!

  94. Kathryn Roberts / Mar 25 2011 2:08 pm

    Kathryn Roberts
    YA Fan/Fiction
    option B

    I used to think the worste part of my life was not knowing my last name.

  95. Theresa Milstein / Mar 25 2011 2:30 pm

    I posted this contest on FB under Theresa Brown Milstein and on my blog sidebar:

    Name Theresa Milstein
    Genre YA Fantasy
    email tmilstein at gmail dot com
    Chose option B (Facebook)

    My amazing first sentence:

    You know how adults always warn children not to run with scissors because they could lose an eye and to stop tipping back their chairs because they could crack open their skulls?

  96. Katrina Lantz / Mar 25 2011 2:57 pm

    Name: Katrina Lantz
    Genre: YA Paranormal with sci-fi elements
    Email: katrina (dot) lantz (at) gmail (dot) com

    Option B:!/katrinalantznov

    My first sentence:

    I would never see Travis again.

  97. Jen Maschari / Mar 25 2011 2:58 pm

    Name: Jen Maschari
    Genre: Middle Grade Humor/Zombie (if that can be considered a genre!)
    E-mail: jen.maschari AT gmail DOT com
    Option A

    First line: I’m sure you’re here because you’ve heard the rumors.

    • Jen Maschari / Mar 27 2011 3:26 pm


      The first line is actually: I’m sure you’re here because you have heard the rumors.


  98. Karen Staman / Mar 25 2011 3:44 pm

    Name: Karen Staman
    Genre: Middle Grade
    Option A
    First line: Most people think I don’t listen, but when I listen hard, I can hear the earthworms, and they are really distracting.

  99. Anita Saxena / Mar 25 2011 6:49 pm

    Name: Anita Saxena
    Genre: YA Fantasy
    E-mail: anitasaxena at yahoo dot com
    Option A
    The driver throws my stuff in with Mom’s suitcases and slams the trunk with a finality that signifies, to me at least, the end of my life as I know it.

  100. Kimberly Miller / Mar 25 2011 7:28 pm

    Name – Kimberly Miller
    Genre – YA urban fantasy
    email – kimberlymillerpa at aol dot com
    option B

    First sentence: I spotted her shivering figure cowering under a tall pine tree.

  101. Marie Cruz / Mar 25 2011 11:01 pm

    Name: Marie Cruz
    Genre: YA
    email: mariveecruz at yahoo dot com
    option you chose [A or B]: A

    Your amazing first sentence: “Danny had blood and bits of wool all over his clothes.”

  102. shelley / Mar 25 2011 11:08 pm

    Name: shelley seely
    Genre: MG Paranormal Mystery
    option you chose [A or B]Facebook and newsletter

    Your amazing first sentence: “I used to think that ghosts haunt places, not people.”

  103. Morgan Fedderly / Mar 26 2011 5:33 am

    Name: Morgan Fedderly (Book Title: Grundy)
    Genre: Picture book
    Option: A and Facebook

    Your amazing first sentence:
    “On a farm that sits back on a dusty dirt road
    There began a true story that deserves to be told,
    About the message inside a handwritten letter
    And things getting worse before they get better.”

  104. Keiru Bakke / Mar 26 2011 7:18 am

    Name: Keiru Bakke
    Genre: Paranormal Romance
    option: B

    And despite our bumpy encounters, he stands as the first man on Earth who has ever truly interested me.

  105. Beth Hull / Mar 26 2011 7:55 am

    Name: Beth Hull

    Genre: YA Fantasy

    Email: tbeth.hull (at) gmail (dot) com

    Option B

    My amazing first sentence: The boy would be dead before the waning crescent.

  106. Ladonna Watkins / Mar 26 2011 11:45 am

    Name Ladonna Watkins
    Genre YA Multicultural Steampunk Fairytale
    option you chose [A or B] B

    Your amazing first sentence.
    Isabell Kincaid glanced down at the makeshift engagement ring on her index finger, a yellow string.

  107. Stephanie Wardrop / Mar 26 2011 11:59 am

    Stephanie Wardrop
    YA contemporary
    option B (facebook)

    With Michael Endicott and me, it was loathe at first sight — well, first sound, really, since it was only when he spoke that I realized exactly how obnoxious he was.

  108. Silvia / Mar 26 2011 12:29 pm

    Silvia Park
    YA fantasy
    Option A

    First sentence: When Misha started seeing holes in people, she told her mother.

  109. rebekah / Mar 26 2011 2:12 pm

    YA Fantasy
    option A

    Irene knew that before the sun rose over the eastern mountains she’d be dead.

  110. Megan Lentz / Mar 26 2011 2:43 pm

    Name: Megan Lentz
    Genre: YA dystopian
    Email: dragonflyword at

    Option B (also subscribed to Newsletter)

    First line: The gentle swish of my prison door sliding open pulls me back into myself, my body growing tight with tension, my brain struggling to hold on to who I am.

  111. Pam Vickers / Mar 26 2011 2:46 pm

    YA contemporary
    Option A

    Walking along the dim sidewalk, garbage lining the fence, a cop to my left and a social worker on my right, I wondered how I could’ve possibly thought my life couldn’t get worse.

  112. Robert Linke / Mar 26 2011 3:49 pm

    Robert Linke

    Young Adult Fantasy


    Option B

    “Are you sure he’s in Riverside?”

  113. Michele Tennant / Mar 26 2011 6:34 pm

    Michele Tennant
    (email didn’t work duh)
    YA Edgy
    michele [underscore] tennant [at]
    Option A

    I watch, transfixed, as the clear liquid drips into the plastic tube, running in a constant flow through the I.V. needle they stuck into my arm.

  114. Ruth / Mar 26 2011 7:17 pm

    Name: Ruth Donnelly
    Genre: middle grade paranormal
    option you chose [B] (I liked WIFYR on facebook; I’m not on twitter.)

    Your amazing first sentence:

    As she trudged through the woods that fateful March day, Eleanor Olive wished she were a dog.

  115. Amie Kaufman / Mar 27 2011 12:01 am

    Name: Amie Kaufman

    Genre: Middle Grade Fantasy

    Email: amiekaufman ~at~ gmail ~dot~ com

    Option: A

    First Sentence: Samuel was already running when the miller’s shed exploded.

  116. Jeri Baird / Mar 27 2011 8:48 am

    Jeri Baird
    Middle Grade Fantasy Adventure
    A & B

    In the twilight, if you sit very still, there is a magic that occurs between the setting of the sun and the rising of a full moon.

  117. Jenni / Mar 27 2011 11:06 am

    Name: Jenni Merritt
    Genre: YA Dystopian
    Email: jennimerritt.writing (at) gmail (dot) com
    Option you chose [A or B]: I subscribed… and followed on FB/Twitter… and mentioned it in my blog post! (

    Your amazing first sentence: My name is Millie 942B.

  118. Christina Collins / Mar 27 2011 12:28 pm

    Name: Christina Collins
    Option: B (

    First sentence:

    No one else was looking out the window, so no one else saw the raven.

  119. Melissa / Mar 27 2011 12:40 pm

    Am I allowed to participate?!

    Name: Melissa Douglas
    Genre: YA/Paranormal
    option you chose [A or B]: BOTH. Boo yeah!

    Your amazing first sentence: My first kiss killed a girl.

  120. Heather Jackson / Mar 27 2011 1:01 pm

    Name: Heather Jackson

    Genre: Picture Book


    Option you chose: B (Facebook)

    Your amazing first sentence:

    Today was the day Shelly McBelly had been waiting for.

  121. Nicole Zoltack / Mar 27 2011 4:25 pm

    Name: Nicole Zoltack
    Genre: fantasy YA
    email: Nicole.Zoltack AT
    Option B

    Mr. McMichaels hated me ever since he confiscated a story I wrote during class last week.

  122. Celesta Rimington / Mar 27 2011 10:37 pm

    Name: Celesta Rimington
    Genre: Middle Grade Fantasy
    Option A: I signed up for the newsletter and I liked on FB

    First Sentence: Greer Callaghan’s bare legs stuck to the Ford’s vinyl seat and reminded her of her number ten reason why moving to Uncle Llewelyn’s bed and breakfast mansion was a bad idea.

  123. Katharina Gerlach / Mar 28 2011 1:17 am

    Katharina Gerlach
    MG Time Travel
    option B

    I hated old Bodger on the best of days but most of all when he taught science on a Monday morning.

  124. Daniel / Mar 28 2011 7:42 am

    Name: Daniel Crossen
    Genre: YA Fantasy
    Option: B
    First Sentence:
    Something had changed in the early morning, something horrible had been unleashed into the world, and the elements themselves were showing their disapproval.

  125. Janice / Mar 28 2011 7:49 am

    Name: Janice Foy

    Genre: MG Paranormal


    option you chose [A or B]: B

    Your amazing first sentence. “Mom, Dad, I want to be a witch.”

  126. Gail Shepherd / Mar 28 2011 8:28 am

    Name: Gail Shepherd
    Genre: Middle grade

    option you chose [A or B] B: facebook Gail Shepherd, twitter gailshepherd

    Your amazing first sentence. “Daddy said they were going to have to ‘put the bats down.'”

  127. Becky Mahoney / Mar 28 2011 12:38 pm

    Name: Becky
    Genre: YA Fantasy/Horror
    Option: B (Twitter name is cafecliche)

    The floor shuddered against Kalinda’s ribs like grinding teeth.

    • Becky Mahoney / Mar 29 2011 9:06 am

      Aaaand I totally forgot my e-mail. Sorry! It’s ringhappy @ comcast . net.

  128. esteewood / Mar 28 2011 1:00 pm

    Estee Wood
    YA Contemporary/ Horror
    Option A (liked on Facebook)

    Dear Diary,
    I’m writing today to tell you that I’m not going to write anymore.

    • esteewood / Mar 30 2011 12:10 pm

      email: esteewood @ earthlink . net

  129. Madeleine Kuderick / Mar 28 2011 10:00 pm

    Name – Madeleine Kuderick
    Genre – Middle Grade
    email –
    Option A

    Let’s put it this way – the last thing I expected to see on my walk home from school was a magnetic man.

  130. Flo Bertsch / Mar 28 2011 11:35 pm

    Name: Flo Bertsch

    Genre: YA


    Option: A

    First sentence: Amber threw her sister’s picture across the room when she saw the engagement announcement in the newspaper.

  131. Susan (Bloggin' 'bout Books) / Mar 29 2011 6:23 am

    Name: Susan Jensen
    Genre: Realistic fiction (YA)
    Option A or B: (B) Twitter – @bbbforme
    First sentence: When God finally got around to answering my prayers, he did it with some serious style.

  132. Leah Henderson / Mar 29 2011 11:01 am

    Name: Leah Henderson
    Genre: Picture Book
    Option A

    First sentence:

    Miss Bibble, the world’s greatest bauble seeker and pocket keeper, was the nicest, meanest,
    happiest, saddest, sweetest, sourest, friendliest, crabbiest old woman anyone ever did meet.

  133. Angela / Mar 29 2011 1:31 pm

    Name: Angela Citte
    Genre: YA Fantasy
    Option B–Wahoo! Registered for Holly’s class!

    “While I knew it was impossible, I was sure the raven smiled as he spread his silent, pitch-black wings and swallowed me whole.”

  134. Jessi Crossen / Mar 29 2011 4:08 pm

    Name: Jessi Crossen
    Genre: YA Fantasy
    Option: B
    First Sentence:
    An unfortunate drop in the earth opened under my feet as I skirted around a tree.

  135. Sharon Mayhew / Mar 29 2011 4:44 pm

    Name: Sharon Mayhew
    Genre: hf pb
    Email: sharonkmayhew at gmail dot com
    Option B
    First Line:

    It was World War Two and everyone was expected to do their part, even me.

  136. Virginia A. McKenna / Mar 29 2011 5:12 pm

    The first line of my YA novel The Perfect Game: “Thwack! The best sound in the world: a baseball careening off a bat!”

  137. Valerie Larson-Howard / Mar 29 2011 8:34 pm

    Name: Valerie Larson-Howard
    Genre: Picture Book
    Option B and I am registering for the newsletter.
    My first line is:

    ‘Here Ye, Here Ye, The King of Sherman Elementary has arrived,” bellowed Brinkley as he hopped off the bus and barrelled toward the playground.

  138. Miriam Caldwell / Mar 30 2011 4:44 am

    Name: Miriam Caldwell
    Genre: YA contemporary fantasy
    Email: miriam.caldwell (at)
    Option A&B (I did both)

    1st Sentence: It’s often been said that the shortest distance between two points is a straight line, but in the world I live in, a straight line is hard to find.

  139. Cheryl Mansfield / Mar 30 2011 5:44 am

    Name: Cheryl Mansfield
    Genre: Young Middle Grade
    Choose Option A (will also do opt. B when I get home from work)

    Your amazing first sentence:

    For the record, the things you’ll hear about me are not true. Mostly.

  140. Pam Porter / Mar 30 2011 6:17 am

    Here’s my first line of my book-
    “When nine-year-old Molly McGregor plucked the book off the shelf, it quivered.”

  141. Amy Jo Lavin / Mar 30 2011 7:20 am

    Name: Amy Jo Lavin
    Genre: YA Contemporary
    Email: amyjlavin at yahoo dot com
    Option A – newsletter

    First Sentence: It’s debatable whether or not a person weighs less on an airplane.

  142. Julie Daines / Mar 30 2011 7:52 am

    Name: Julie Daines
    Genre: YA
    Option A: Newletter

    First Sentence: When you kill someone, your life is never the same again.

  143. Jenel Cope / Mar 30 2011 7:58 am

    Name: Jenel Cope
    Genre: YA Fantasy
    Option A

    When she saw the smudge of dust on the horizon, Rell missed her turn.

  144. Dana Bailey / Mar 30 2011 11:40 am

    Dana Bailey
    YA – SciFi
    Option B
    Your amazing first sentence: I’d fly away if I could.

  145. Emilee Barnett / Mar 30 2011 11:49 am

    Emilee Barnett
    YA Mystery/Romance
    Option A & B done

    Abigail Mills coped with her feelings of panic by rolling up the graduation program in her hands; her dread tightened, around and around, until the paper, paralyzed with tension, could no longer move.

    • Emilee Barnett / Mar 30 2011 11:51 am

      Here’s my email! Duh! Too excited about the contest to think straight.

  146. Sarah Lynn Walker / Mar 30 2011 2:19 pm

    Young Adult Modern Fantasy

    Option A (and part of B):

    “Something prickly landed on my forehead and began to crawl across it.”

  147. Deb Seyler / Mar 30 2011 2:26 pm

    Name: Deb Seyler

    Genre: Picture Book


    Option A

    First sentence: Today at recess, I spewed jellybeans.

    • Deb Seyler / Apr 1 2011 8:39 am

      Sorry, that should be ‘burped’. “Today at recess, I burped jellybeans.”

  148. Mary M / Mar 30 2011 10:08 pm

    Name: Mary Miller

    Genre: YA


    Option: B

    I raise the hem of my uniform skirt and scribble on my thigh with dark ink, convincing myself this really is the last time.

  149. Brian Higginson / Mar 31 2011 11:34 am

    Brian Higginson
    YA Fantasy
    Option A
    1st Sentence: Finn woke to the sound of his uncle coughing way off in the trees and two messenger dragons twittering to each other on a branch over his head.

  150. Jeff DeCoursey / Mar 31 2011 11:53 am

    Name: Jeff DeCoursey

    Genre: YA


    Option: B

    They say nobody’s perfect, oh really?

  151. Tania / Mar 31 2011 1:33 pm

    Name: Tania Lieman
    Genre: Middle grade
    Option: A
    First Line:
    The traffic lights stuck on orange for nearly ten years at the edge of my hometown are enchanted, not broken.

  152. Aryanna Mae / Apr 1 2011 7:38 am

    Name: Aryanna Mae
    Option: B
    First Line: The silver blade was long and pure; simple in an elegant way.

  153. Lisa Basso / Apr 1 2011 8:27 am

    Name: Lisa Basso
    Genre: Paranormal YA
    email: angel28140 (at) yahoo (dot) com
    Option: A
    First Line: Doctor Graham said I was cured the day he signed my release papers, but there was nothing like a big fat set of wings to pour on the doubt.

  154. Julie Musil / Apr 1 2011 9:12 am

    Name: Julie Musil
    Genre: Paranormal YA
    option I chose [A or B]: option B, and tweeted @juliemusil

    My amazing first sentence: Manny O’Donnell was ten years old when he started his first fire.

  155. Julia Pierce / Apr 1 2011 9:57 am

    Julia Pierce
    Genre- MG Fantasy
    E-mail- laughingpaws at
    Option B

    First Line- Kate knew that she was never going to be happy again.

  156. Niki Bond / Apr 1 2011 2:08 pm

    Name: Niki Bond
    Genre: Fantasy
    Option A

    First Line: “I’m sorry, Anya. Please don’t look for me.”

  157. Shannon Schuren / Apr 1 2011 4:50 pm

    Name: Shannon Schuren
    Genre: MG Fantasy
    Option B
    First Line:
    In my line of work, being seen by a client is like being stranded on a desert island with no toothbrush.

  158. Shannon Schuren / Apr 1 2011 4:51 pm

    Forgot my email:


  159. Ed DeCaria / Apr 1 2011 9:04 pm

    Name: Ed DeCaria
    E-mail: Included with reply, so I chose not to publish it openly
    Genre: Younger middle grade
    Option B: Twitter only
    First line:

    Something stinks. Climb up your nose and scratch the back of your eyeballs stinks.

  160. Rebecca Snyder / Apr 1 2011 11:58 pm

    Name: Rebecca Snyder


    Genre: YA

    Option A and B

    First Line:

    Mom was hiding again.

  161. Jessica / Apr 2 2011 2:44 am


    Simon was seven the first time he stumbled into the shadows.

  162. Lis Melchior / Apr 2 2011 2:51 am

    Name: Lis Melchior
    Genre: YA Fantasy/Historical
    A & B

    Your amazing first sentence.:

  163. Constance Lombardo / Apr 2 2011 5:47 am

    Constance Lombardo
    Picture Book
    Option A

    First Line:
    Princess Rex wakes to another day of sun, fun and…DESTRUCTION!

  164. Constance Lombardo / Apr 2 2011 5:56 am

    ps. I also ‘liked’ you on FB and I don’t twitter. And thanks for hosting this amazing contest!

  165. erica and christy / Apr 2 2011 9:20 am

    Name: Erica Olson
    Genre: YA contemporary
    email: ericao75(at)
    Option: B (twitter as erica and christy, FB as my personal id)

    Amazing first sentence: I slammed the car door and rushed past the men putting pieces of my life into a big white truck.

  166. Camille Ballou / Apr 2 2011 9:41 am

    Name: Camille Ballou

    Genre: YA Parnormal

    email: caballou(at)energysolutions(dot)com

    Option: B (and I think option A)

    Amazing first sentence: Macoy was transfixed on the remaining swallow of brown liquid he was swirling around the plastic party cup in his hand while he ignored the too-skinny blonde sticking her tongue in his ear and licking his neck.

  167. Chersti Nieveen / Apr 2 2011 11:25 am

    Contest closes tonight at Midnight, MST. So get your entries in while you can! Comments will be closed at that point. Good luck all!

  168. RaShelle / Apr 2 2011 11:42 am

    Name: RaShelle Workman
    Genre: YA SF romance
    Option B

    First sentence: “Happy immortality to me,” I sang softly; to the tune of a human song I’d learned from a teacher.

  169. Christy Hintz / Apr 2 2011 1:18 pm

    Name: Christy Hintz
    Genre: YA Paranormal
    option you chose: B (twitter as erica and christy, fb as my personal account)

    Your amazing first sentence: An icy sensation dripped down my spine, my only warning before cloudy blue light shined across the faded leaves.

  170. Shiela Blankemeier / Apr 2 2011 2:30 pm

    Name: Shiela Blankemeier
    Genre: YA fantasy
    option you chose [A or B]: B – following on Twitter (shielacblank) and liked on facebook (shielamom)

    Your amazing first sentence: Liliana laid her hand across her newborn daughter’s bare chest.

  171. Cayleigh Hickey / Apr 2 2011 2:40 pm

    Name: Cayleigh Hickey
    Genre: YA Fantasy
    Option A

    First Sentence: If you caught Ivy Edwards at random on any given day, nine times out of ten she’d be doing something downright mad.

  172. Julie Angeli / Apr 2 2011 4:21 pm

    Name: Julie Angeli
    Genre: Middle Grade Fantasy
    option: A

    “Huh?” These three little letters represented my first ten years of life and the reason I was trapped in a box being beeped to death by my hearing doctor.

  173. Rebecca Talley / Apr 2 2011 5:09 pm

    Name: Rebecca Talley

    Genre: YA Paranormal


    Option: B

    1st sentence: The sudden bright light chased all traces of darkness away while I waited, muscles tensed, for his judgment

  174. Stephanie Surles / Apr 2 2011 5:26 pm

    Name: Stephanie Surles

    Genre: YA


    Option: Option B (Twitter as StephSurles)

    First Sentence: “With the recent incidents in São Paulo and Tianjin, as well as the ongoing challenges, our numbers have become perilously low,” the silver haired gentleman said.

    Thanks for hosting this contest!

  175. Kristen Hilty / Apr 2 2011 5:31 pm

    Name: Kristen Hilty
    Genre: Picture Book
    option you chose [A or B]: I chose B!

    Your amazing first sentence:
    One day after an especially sweaty game of lizard tag, Harry asked Madge an important question.

    I also spread the word on my blog:

    Thanks for doing this! Fun! Fun!

  176. Michael DI Gesu / Apr 2 2011 6:15 pm

    Name: Michael Di Gesu

    Genre: M/G Fantasy


    Option: Option B

    First Sentence:

    Car lights flooded the Esplanade as limo after limo pulled into the circular driveway of the the Mayor of Helmsdale’s mansion.

  177. Mattie Noall / Apr 2 2011 6:26 pm

    Mattie Noall
    Picture Book
    Option A
    Also posted on Facebook about the contest.

    “The snow started to fall at evening’s last light,
    It fell harder and faster and kept up all night.”

  178. Amy C / Apr 2 2011 7:36 pm

    Name: Amy Conner

    Genre: Contemporary YA

    Email: amy(underscore)conner(at)live(dot)com

    Option A!

    First Line: I wouldn’t have hooked up with the cheerleader on Monday, or Nathan’s little sister on Thursday, if I would have known I was going to meet the girl of my dreams on Saturday.

  179. Jenn / Apr 2 2011 8:18 pm

    Name: Jenn
    Genre: YA Historical Romance
    email: phanhnguyen1 at
    Option A please!

    First sentence: With one last look over her shoulder at Fairview manor, the only home she’d ever known, Julie Hawthorne wrenched the thick gold band off her finger.

  180. Leisha Maw / Apr 2 2011 9:00 pm

    Name: Leisha
    Genre: YA fantasy
    email: klmaw (at) aol (dot) com
    Option: A and B What can I say, I love WIFYR.
    Sentence: Trin circled her opponent.

  181. E. Ashkenazy / Apr 2 2011 9:13 pm

    Name: E. Ashkenazy

    Genre: Paranormal


    Option: A

    Sentence: “It was so bold and striking that it held her attention the minute she stepped onto the block.”

  182. Yamile Mendez / Apr 2 2011 9:16 pm

    Name: Yamile Mendez
    Genre: YA Contemporary
    Option: B. @yamilesmendez

    First sentence:
    When the minute hand hit the thousandth hour, Sebastian’s childhood died inside him–he was ten years old.

  183. Melanie Skelton / Apr 2 2011 10:35 pm

    Name: Melanie Skelton
    Genre: MG
    option: A & B

    Your amazing first sentence.
    Ava’s twisted ankle was to blame for the failed promise to keep Asher from doing anything stupid.

  184. Chersti Nieveen / Apr 3 2011 5:18 am

    This contest is now closed. Winners will be posted Saturday April 9th, with the announcement of the next awesome contest.


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