Hello dear blog readers! I need your help.
Brenda over at Brenda Drake Writes…under the influence of coffee is hosting a SHOW ME THE VOICE contest that I’m participating in. I’ve posted the first 250 words of my manuscript, THE COLOR TRANSPARENT, and according to contest rules I need to collect critiques for the next two days so it can be polished for the contest. So thanks to all those who leave a comment with their critique!
**update** I revised based on the first 18 comments, and I’m eager for more feedback. **update**
Dues to this contest, my normal Monday book review will be moved to Tuesday of this week.
Name: Chersti Nieveen
Title: The Color Transparent [see more here]
Genre: YA fantasy (magical realism)
When I was five, my favorite color was the shade of clear plastic or clean glass. The color transparent.
My kindergarten teacher had repeatedly told me that transparent was not a color. I kept silent—my tiny hands trembled and my mouth refused to form words, even back then—but whenever I filled out one of those ‘about me’ papers, I wrote down my favorite color as “clear.”
Now that I’m a sophomore in high school, I’ve learned to say that my favorite color is white. Just one more thing I’ve had to do to blend in with the other high school students.
But it’s all a lie. My favorite color is still transparent. And I can never truly blend in when I’m only pretending that I belong here on earth.
I wriggled deeper into the armchair, looking down at the open book in my lap. But the words blurred before my eyes, unable to hold my attention, and again I looked back at the window.
Somehow I’d known it would happen tonight. A thought—a whisper in the back of my mind, hidden until this exact moment. As if I’d always known the truth.
The Shade was coming for me.
Dread crawled inside my skin, making my heart pulsate into a pounding rhythm. I sat tucked away in a forgotten corner surrounded by shelves and shadows. Around me, the library seemed colder. I rubbed my arm through my thin white jacket. Tonight I would have to face the Shade.
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